Wednesday Write-in #25: Busy Living

Wednesday Write-in #25 @ CAKE.shortandsweet

Prompts: junk  ::  captivity  ::  edible  ::  sombre  ::  full moon

BUSY LIVING

When Marko got out a full moon was shining its somber light down on the cityscape before him. The world wasn’t the same and he knew it. The city was cold. The good stuff had receded into the shadows in the face of all the overcrowded junk and it made him sad.

He’d been gone a long time.

It wasn’t long after Marko got out that he wanted to go back in. And it wouldn’t be hard for someone like him to do it in such little time. He was the kind of person that could operate with however little space you gave him.

He was dynamic.

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But when he got to a payphone his woman urged him to the pub and the pub was full of friends and the friends were smiling for him. So Marko set aside his plot for quickly filling the empty spaces inside and took a drink for himself, tried to relax. His woman and his friends were Russians and Poles from the southwest side and some of them had been in too.

Some were on their way.

“Na zdrowie,” they said, slapping him on the shoulder. “Welcome home.”

Marko didn’t have time to think about it all again until long after sunrise on the following day.

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And for the first time in a long time Marko slept long enough to sleep it off.  And for the first time in a long time he woke up next to a woman.

His woman.

“Everyone is so glad to have you back,” she murmured sleepily. “I’m so glad to have you back.”

He wanted to ask her about all that had eaten at him while he was gone and that ate at him still like a sliver of glass in the skin but he couldn’t bring himself to it. She was too warm, the light in the room too serene.

He wanted to slip out quietly but the morning was too calm.

“I haven’t slept like that in two years, Katya.”

She moved in close and he closed his eyes and forgot what he wanted to ask her, maybe forever.

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13 responses to “Wednesday Write-in #25: Busy Living

  1. Emmaleene Leahy

    I really like this. I love the way you allow the reader to fill in the blanks. It allowed us to be drawn in. I did imagine that he had been in prison but I don’t think that’s important. What’s important here is the sense of instutionalisation he felt. The style really suits the piece and I love the way the visual images match the hinting/pared back style. The ending was great and I think it was appropriate that the reader doesn’t find out what he wanted to ask, it’s like it evaporates with his institutionalisation. Well done.

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  2. Was he a werewolf? Sorry, I didn’t make it past the prompts…jk I agree with the others that there are just enough insinuations for a legitimate ending.

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  3. I really enjoyed the style of this piece. The writing is really pared back which worked very well with the content. I saw above that you trimmed many of the hints – it worked perfectly.

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  4. I enjoyed the ambiguity – Not knowing why he was in prison made the piece seem like a new, fresh chapter in his life.

    that “a sliver of glass in the skin” line was an excellent description of certain feelings. well done.

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  5. Elaine Peters

    I’m guessing when someone comes of of any institution they feel disorientated and sort of miss it. I like the gentle ending.

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  6. Nice work. Was he in prison? It seems to me that he was. A subtle hint as to why might be useful. If he wasn’t, excuse my air headedness.

    P.S. I don’t know if i told you, but your posts stopped showing up in my reader a couple of weeks ago, so I turned on email notifications.

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    • Yes, he was. I trimmed most of the hints that I had previously included to give the reader more ways of coming to it. I hope it still works.

      You know, I’ve noticed some buggy things with the WordPress reader lately. Though your posts still show up, others that I follow don’t. I would recommend “unfollowing” and then “following” again, if that makes sense. It might fix the problem.

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